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Bella Posted by Bella at 12:39 PM on May 27, 2008

This week is finals week. Ick. But, to make up for the fact that they are slowly turning our brains into mush, school lets out at 11:20 a.m. Tuesday-Thursday. On Friday, we get out at 10:40 a.m.! Yes!

I am extremely sad. Tear. On someone's freewebs page, they posted up my first fanfiction that I ever wrote (when I was in 8th grade.) Then, people completely bashed it! I have no problem with constructive criticism ( the story was crap), I don't like it when people just say (and I quote!)

um.........this is supposed to be Edward? Plz be realistic. This SUCKED!!!!! -hgjhk

OOOOOOOOk. that wuz well- there are no words in the English language that can describe this. thats no compliment. wuz that Edward doing wut ever? -???

that is NOT edward ahhh it drove me INSANE and AHHHH its so bad!!! angry -the volturi

Terrible terrible TERRIBLE!! Sorry, but true. No one can get the characters as perfect as their creator, but you are probably the farthest from perfecting them. -anonymousTWILIGHTfan-

Sorry but I think that it was a little to violent to be Edward, and that you must not interpret the book very well if you think that story was any good at all!!!!!! -Person

THIS IS AWFUL! angry OH DEAR! -KayKay

sorry but i agree with every one alice would not do that to edward plus edward is to graceful to break things dry -vampiregirl

Grr!  I only got one nice review. I shall put her nice compliment in big text!

Here we go!

It was beautiful! I laughed, I cried, and then laughed some more...hehebig grin

Here is my reply to their replies! Ha! I posted it nay but 5 minutes ago.

Hey, bashers. It's the author of the "terrible" story here.

Did you think that this was meant to be non-canon? I heard this song, and was just thinking how (minus the sexual connotation) it matched Edward's craving for Bella blood-wise.

If you want to say something constructive to us writers, we have no problem with it. Heck, we encourage it. But to just write that you hate it or how terrible it is shows a maturity level that even Emmett would scoff at.

That's right. I went there.

The pissed-off writer,

Bella

Here is my story. Is it that bad? Leave comments as replies!

Tear You Apart: Submitted by Bella

Disclaimer: The subjects of the story, Twilight and She Wants Revenge, are not mine. If they were, I would faint.

New Disclaimer: Don't be a hater.

Also, this is rated PG-13, due to the song at the end.

When I walked toward our table, I could tell something was happening. Emmett and Rosalie were laughing mockingly at Edward. Alice was really excited, she practically couldn?t stay in her seat, which was affecting Jasper. Of course, that means affecting everyone in the room. But, they were excited before. Only one person looked mad. My Greek god, Edward. The not-needed veins in his forehead were popping out. If we were animated, steam would have come out. I hated to see him mad. ?Alice, what?s going on??

Bad question for me to ask. Emmett and Rosalie started laughing, and Edward punched the table so hard that it almost broke. ?OH, Edward. It is so not a big deal. And I know Bella will love it,? Alice says exasperated, making Jasper send somber emotions to Rosalie and Emmett. ? I doubt it.? Edward gently leads me toward our seats, and peck kisses me on my cheek, which redden. How embarrassing. He chuckled.

?I won?t like what??

Emmett jumps in. ? Oh, Bella. It?s HYSTERICAL! See, Edward accidentally spilled paint on one of Alice?s Verbachi whateve..?

?It?s Versace, dip-wad.? Rosalie chuckles.

?Whatever. So, Alice was maaaad. Carlisle said that Edward owed Alice either one expensive gift or one hour where he has to do whatever she says. He chose the time, cause Alice would have bought stuff for you. She made him spend 40 minutes ironing her clothes. Now, for the other 20, she is going to make HIM S??

"EMMETT!" Edward yelled before calming himself. "If Bella has to know, at least let Alice tell her. She won't go so overboard she makes it sound like I'm going to be in some kind of porno."

"Like you would be in a porno, you're such a prude. Rosalie, on the other hand,.."

"Gross! Get those disgusting pictures out of your head! Sorry Rosalie."

"None taken." She didn't look mad, she looked slightly amused.

"Well, if you stopped mind-raping me, you wouldn't see those pictures. Anyway, if you actually paid attention to all of the things you read in my little mind book, you wouldn't be such a prissy little hypocrite.."

"Hypocrite?! How am I a hypocrite? I don't spend my free time thinking that having...well, you know...in that amount of time as a challenge."

"See? You can't even say the word! And I bet if the thoughts in my mind involved Bella, and were in your thoughts, you wouldn't find them so disgusting!"

"Boys, calm down!" Alice spoke calmly but with a ring of authority I had only heard once before. " Do you want me to tell Bella or not?" They stopped, looking down, Emmett pleased, Edward pissed. "Now," she turned toward me, her eagerness coming back, which in turn was affecting Jasper, then me. " Edward is going to be in the talent show tonight."

I was shocked. Partly, because it seemed like Alice thought that Edward wanted to do it. Also, the sign-up sheet was put up a month ago. I told her that, and she chuckled.

"Can see the future, remember? I was the first one to sign up."

"So, you knew Edward would ruin something?"

"Yep. He ruined a Versace knockoff, so that's why I'm not mad!" She smiled innocently as Edward glared at her. I laughed, but quickly ceased when Edward started to glare at me too. "Edward, you know I don't think it's funny. I am just so excited to hear you sing." Then, I looked under my eyelids, trying to daze him like he always dazes me. I felt like an idiot, but apparently it worked. He smiled.

" Don't worry, Eddie."

"Alice..." The steam-face came back.

"Sorr-ee, Edward." Alice tried to look snooty, but it didn't work. She started to giggle again. Then, proceeded to jump up and down like a kid on christmas eve.

"Listen, Alice, I only agreed to this because you promised me you wouldn't tortute Bella. I take it that promise is still intact?"

"Of course. I am so excited!!!!!!!"

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After an hour of haggling, I fell to Alice's charms. I swear, this outfit is over the top. A chocolate-brown satin dress, it looked like it should be worn at a wedding (On Profile). But, I know Edward would like it.

Once we got our seats, right in front, the lights started to dim. We only had to stay till Edward was done. It was pretty funny. Lauren and Jessica sang the song "Girlfriend", by Avril Lavigne. I might be plain, but I'm not that plain. Ben sang, well rapped, the song "White and Nerdy", by Weird Al. It was pretty funny. Next, and last for us, was Edward. He looked perfect in his black pants and white collared shirt. He coughed, then started to sing.

"This is the song, Tear you Apart. It's written by She Wants Revenge."

Got a big plan, this mindset maybe its right
At the right place and right time, maybe tonight
And the whisper or handshake sending a sign
Wanna make out and kiss hard, wait nevermind

Late night, and passing, mention it flipped her
Best friend, who knows saying maybe it slipped
But the slip turns to terror and a crush to light
When she walked in, he throws up, believe its the fright

Its cute in a way, till you cannot speak
And you leave to have a cigarette, your knees get weak
An escape is just a nod and a casual wave
Obsessed about it, heavy for the next two days

It's only just a crush, it'll go away
It's just like all the others it'll go away
Or maybe this is danger and you just don't know
You pray it all away but it continues to grow

I want to hold you close
Skin pressed against me tight
Lie still, and close your eyes girl
So lovely, it feels so right

I want to hold you close
Soft breasts, beating heart
As I whisper in your ear

I want to fcking tear you apart

Then he walked up and told her, thinking that he'd passed
And they talked and looked away a lot, doing the dance
Her hand brushed up against his, she left it there
Told him how she felt and then they locked in a stare

They took a step back, thought about it, what should they do
Cause theres always repercussions when you're dating in school

But their lips met, and reservations started to pass
Whether this was just an evening or a thing that would last

Either way he wanted her and this was bad
He wanted to do things to her it was making him crazy
Now a little crush turned into a like
And now he wants to grab her by the hair and tell her

I want to hold you close
Skin pressed against me tight
Lie still, and close your eyes girl
So lovely, it feels so right

I want to hold you close
Soft breasts, beating heart
As I whisper in your ear
I want to fcking tear you apart

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